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Smelnick's Music

Smelnick

Creeping On You
V.I.P.
I just recorded this song this morning

Perfect Excuse.mp3

lyrics
(AmEGD)I often wonder
how my life got this way
so mixed up turned around
fucked up beyond repair

I've blamed it on the money
I've blamed it on my father
who wasn't much a father
when I needed him most


I've searched my mind
I've searched my soul
searched every freaking crevice
of this prarie hell hole

i've come to one conclusion
why things, they are this way
theres only one thing standing
in my path to success

chorus 1(AmEmGDAmEmCD)
------
I'm my own worst enemy, i get in my own way
I'm my own worst enemy, i just can't seem to let go
i'm hiding in the past, clinging to my pain
unwilling to let go of this perfect excuse
--------

I'm starting to make progress
chucking off the chains
I'm starting to break free
of my pain riddled past

the future is unknown
but the past was unforeseen
I may not see it coming
i'll know just what to do

like a bird taking flight
I'm soaring through the skies
of forgetting and forgiving
that evil freaking bastard

my kin may still be stuck
in their own stinking ruts
but i've chosen to move on
along my path to success


chorus 2
---------
I'm my own best friend, I got out of my own way
I'm my own best friend, I've learned to let it go
I'm striving for the future, letting go my pain
no longer making use of that perfect excuse


I found a stable and longer lasting host for my music, so hopefully I'll be updating this thread with some more recent ones in the future.
 
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Bliss

Sally Twit
Danny, that is a really beautiful song. The lyrics have a deep meaning and I loved the way you sang it. I could tell it was from the heart.
I've saved it to my iPod.
 

Smelnick

Creeping On You
V.I.P.
I'm glad that you liked it Bliss

Here is another one I recorded a week ago, but just got around to uploading. It's called Generation Before. It's about my dad and somewhat abstractly talks about things up till now.

Generation Before.mp3
lyrics
open up and look inside
this place where he did once reside
he's not here but he once was
creator of my flesh and blood

although he cant seem to ever find them
words so wise at the tip of his tongue
for the sake, of all his kin
he kissed her gently, then walked through the door

chorus (AmCGD)
------
even though he's not always there
i know he still holds love for his heir
hidden deep a reason to be proud
hovering beneath miles of cloud
there was a time when I longed for him
but no longer do I sit and pine
his absence no longer causes pain
it's in the past, it's forgiven now
------

he's not the man i will become
but i am now what he once was
man of strength and purity
until he touched that single drop

now he's alone in mind and soul
no will power not to partake
this drink made of fermented fruit
to ferment my own flesh and blood

chorus

he is consumed there is no lie
he's gone from us he's gone from earth
no bringing back what he once was
now is the time to let him go

*no chorus*

in the distance there is a light
the hidden hope
it shines through now

I saw him there sitting on the bed
He knew not my name
But I felt no shame

Modded Chorus
Even though he is hardly there
A wasted shell of what he once was
I know he still holds love for his heir
His mind rotted by fermented fruit
there was a time when I longed for him
but no longer do I sit and pine
his absence no longer causes pain
it's in the past, it's forgiven now
 

Bliss

Sally Twit
Another beautiful one. I mean this in a nice way but it's nice to hear your non-drunk music lol. You've got a lot of talent. I hope you get to use it someday.

The best songs are always those that come from the heart, that mean something to the song writer.
 

Smelnick

Creeping On You
V.I.P.
Just recorded this now for you guys

Rock Bottom.mp3

lyrics
bright light shining in through the window
do you see it
birds are chirping out a melody
do you hear them
the whole wide world is spinning all around you
life is passing by and you hardly even notice
why the long face, whats got you down
why are you sad
when you really should be glad


prechorus
--------
you're falling down to the depths of despair
but don't despair because one thing is still true

there's only one way to go when you've hit rock bottom
only one way to go when you've fallen from the top
when you feel your world slipping, hang onto one thing
you can only go up from hereeee, yes you can only go up from heerre




you wake up monday morning, it's hard to going
drink some coffee
you try start your car, it takes 12 tries
you're getting angry
the traffic is horrendous, you get to work late
your boss is yelling at you, but you don't even care
you're sitting at your desk but you're doing no work
why are you there
when you really should be home


prechorus 2
-----------
your life seems so drab, it's lacking appeal
don't be depressed because one thing is still true

there's only one way to go when you've hit rock bottom
only one way to go when you've fallen from the top
when you feel your world slipping, hang onto one thing
you can only go up from hereeee, yes you can only go up from heerre
------
Can\'t Beat Me Down.mp3

lyrics
AmEmGF

i still remember that day so long ago
when you came into my life/ started to wreak havoc
I knew from the start that I didn't like you
when you wouldn't take my mom as your wife

at first it was fine and you seemed okay
I thought maybe I was wrong to assume
but then your colours shone and I saw through your mask
and my hatred I was quick to resume

it went on like that for a couple of years
and things started to get worse
you wanted control and you wanted your way
so you stomped your foot and started to curse

that wasn't too bad and I'd learned to live
with your childish tantrums and strife
then you started to swing your pudgy little fists
and you tried to start ruling my life


*Chorusish Bridge
*--------
A G A G A G A G
*Well you can't beat me down, you won't beat me down
*i've got spirit of steel, a broken body but a spirit of steel
*maybe sticks and stones, maybe sticks and stones are gonna break my bones
*but your petty insults, but your petty little insults never will


(chorus) bridgeishthingy D C G Am
--------
(but that's all in the past and I barely remember
how you beat me to the ground and you tried to break my spirit)
I was a little tiny boy, who never meant noone no harm
fists are no solution but you didn't want to hear it

(but that's all in the past and I barely remember
how you beat me to the ground and you tried to break my spirit)
I'm a giant hulking man, and I only mean you harm
this here's my right fist, you're damn well gonna fear it
--------

you were a very, very horrible man
in every way, you deserved to die
while the other children, went outside to play
i was in my room nursing a concussion

I got it just that day from you balled up fucking fist
that you swung at me in anger for some stupid bullshit reason
perhaps it was because I'd merely voiced out my opinion
just tell me to shut up, you don't need to cave my head in

but I guess that in the end, its only physical pain
scars will heal, bones will mend and bruises go away
although your fists and words did much to wreck my body
this anger that I harbour is only slicing up my soul

need to learn to let go, let the past remain in the past
don't have to see your face, now it's time to move on
no longer will this hatred burn within my heart and soul
as hard a task as it may be, I've learned to forgive you

chorusish Bridge 2
0-----------------0

No, it won't get me don't. My past events won't get me down
I've got a spirit of steel, my body healed over a spirit of steel
maybe sticks and stones, sticks and stones they may have broke my bones
but these memories, these memories, they no longer will


(chorus) bridgeishthingy D C G Am
--------
(but that's all in the past and I barely remember
how you beat me to the ground and you tried to break my spirit)
my soul was almost crushed, but i managed to hang in there
but i'll be damned if I let anyone near it

(but that's all in the past and I barely remember
how you beat me to the ground and you tried to break my spirit)
My heart softened and I'm starting to feel peaceful
the pain and sorrow melts away I no longer have to fear it
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Smelnick

Creeping On You
V.I.P.
YouTube - Crappy Shoes
YouTube - Generation Before


Here's a couple more for my fans. Just a couple vid recordings. I'd do just a voice recording, since it'd be better quality, but I can't be arsed to hookup my fancy mic right now. I'd have to download software and crap since it doesn't like windows that much. Oh how I desire a mac
 

Smelnick

Creeping On You
V.I.P.
When I Go.mp3

lyrics
the world is changing
all around me
I have no controll

i'm growing older
gaining wisdom
to share when I am old

time is passing
the end is nearing
doing what i'm told

the end is coming
where will I be
what will they say



chorus
--------
When I'm (you're) gone
From this earth
I'll wonder
what they have to say
(I'll wonder what
the hell to say)

When I (you) pass
from this life
what will
I(you) leave behind

memories
and good deeds
only go
so far

what will I(you) leave
when I(you) go
and how long
will it last
-----

burning bridges
slashing friendships
is not the way to go

anger and hatred
and bitter grudges
they will have to go

a thousand smiles
every year
and everyone will know

that your soul is a kind soul
and your spirit was free
and you will know


-------

eternity will
last forever
that is how long i'll be gone

in that time will
my name be known
or will they forget

a legacy is
what i want to leave
one of peace and kindness

its the kind of thing that
will last forever
and when my time comes I'll
wonder
 

Bliss

Sally Twit
That's probably the best song I've heard by you, Danny. You sang really well. You weren't too loud or too fast. The music was beautiful, the lyrics are really great and once again, as I always say, you sang it from the heart. Keep it up!
 

Smelnick

Creeping On You
V.I.P.
Thankyou. I was a bit tipsy while I recorded it. Usually I suck at singing while picking but I guess my skills are improving. I plan to rerecord that song later in the week once I'm clearheaded and can practice it a bit more. I think I'll leave off the final repeat of the chorus though. Just end it on the final verse.
 

PretzelCorps

Registered Member
Kay man, like I said, I went and English Lit. up your lyrics; here's my recommendations, along with why I changed what I changed. You can take and leave whatever you like, although I'd still like to hear you sing this version:

The world is changing,
All around me,
I have no control.

I'm growing older;
I'm gaining wisdom,
to share when I become old.

(Nothing for these first two, they're just fine in my opinion)

The time is passing;
The leaves are turning; (or "The snow is falling")
I'm doing what I am told.

(I changed this to a seasonal metaphor for aging, because it sounds nice, and also so it doesn't say 'the end is nearing' twice)

The end is coming;
Wonder where I'll be,
And how I'm going to go.

(Don't remember why I changed this; I think it's because you said 'wonder what they'll say' twice)


Chorus
-------
And when I'm gone
From this Earth,
I wonder
what they'll have to say...

'Cause when I pass
From this life,
will I have come
past your way?

Memories and good deeds:
They only take a man so far.

What will I leave
When I go?
Will I have touched
Where I roamed?

(This is what I meant when I said a line was burnt into my brain; I think this chorus would sound very nice with your voice)
-------

Burning bridges,
Slashing friendships;
Something something overflow.

Anger and hatred,
Your bitter grudges,
It's not the the only way to go. (or "they will have to go")

(Couldn't think of good words yet, but I was trying to rework these ones so you don't rhyme go with go; just another recommendation on my part)

A thousand smiles
In every moment,
And everyone will know.

(Again, just for sound)


-------
And when you're gone
From this Earth,
I'll wonder
What the Hell to say.

'Cause when you've passed
From this life,
Will you've have often
Come my way?

Memories and good deeds
Can only take a man so far.

What will you leave
When you go?
Will you have touched
Where I roamed?

(I really like the way you inverted your words for the second chorus)
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Eternity will
last forever;
That's how long we'll be gone.

(I said we, because your song is about 'you' too)

And in that time will
My name be cherished,
Or will they forget
Who I am?

A legacy will
last forever;

(I started going over this, but got tired and can't think anymore. If you like my recommendations thus far, I can work on this part a bit more.)
 
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