Sitting by the grave of my sanity

Discussion in 'Art & Creative' started by Merc, Feb 19, 2007.

  1. Merc

    Merc Certified Shitlord V.I.P. Lifetime

    So you want something dark? Here you go, wrote this a few minutes ago:





    Then the snow fell
    Upon the dying greens
    Landing upon the land
    Of this man’s fading dreams

    His shadow has left
    The memories vivid and cold
    As the shriveled man
    Sinks into the ground so old
     

  2. AYHJA

    AYHJA Registered Member

    I think you would get a lot more out of your poetic shorts by nixing the rhyme scheme and replacing it with some more powerful language...
     

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