Hold me, baby

Merc

Certified Shitlord
V.I.P.
#1
Just a quick poem I wrote the other week. I was in a really gloomy mood, so I'm sure it shows.

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Hold me baby
Only lonely
A house before me
The windows misshapen cruelly

Dimmed vision through clouded glass
I wonder how long I'll last
For fractured legs and demon's breath to pass

Drink me hollow
Icy white to follow

I'm done
 

Kyo_Muramasa

Nefarious Kaizoku Capt'n
#2
I like it, it's something I haven't heard before or anything that's like it, Write more!^^; Geez that poem gave me a cold chill down my spine too >>; The one thing I liked was how one thing went with another to describe the scene/vision u wanted ppl to see Merc.