[GF Records] Best Writer - Poll Thread

Discussion in 'The Bathroom Wall' started by Chaos, Feb 4, 2010.

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Which entry was the best?

Poll closed Feb 11, 2010.
  1. Entry #1

    3 vote(s)
    27.3%
  2. Entry #2

    2 vote(s)
    18.2%
  3. Entry #3

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  4. Entry #4

    5 vote(s)
    45.5%
  5. Entry #5

    1 vote(s)
    9.1%
  1. Chaos

    Chaos Epic Gamer V.I.P. Lifetime

    Well, there was five entries in total, and I've just posted all of them. Please read through and choose the one you think is the best. Feel free to comment your thoughts on any and all entries in this thread, not the entry threads themselves. The entry with the most votes wins, and the writers will be revealed after the results. :)

    Entries were posted randomly in no particular order:

    Entry #1: http://www.generalforum.com/writers-authors/gf-records-best-writer-entry-1-a-68748-new-post.html

    Entry #2: http://www.generalforum.com/writers-authors/gf-records-best-writer-entry-2-a-68749.html#post779438

    Entry #3: http://www.generalforum.com/writers-authors/gf-records-best-writer-entry-3-a-68750.html#post779439

    Entry #4: http://www.generalforum.com/writers-authors/gf-records-best-writer-entry-4-a-68751.html#post779440

    Entry #5: http://www.generalforum.com/writers-authors/gf-records-best-writer-entry-5-a-68752.html#post779441
     

  2. AngelsPeak

    AngelsPeak Wanna play?

    I voted for the story that caught me in the first paragraph. The way I see it, if you don't grab me in the first few sentences, you're not going to grab me at all.
    I won't say which specifically, but for those who posted stories that didn't take off until the 2nd or 3rd paragraph, I didn't bother going farther than the first, so you may have written a pretty good story, but I only made it all the way through three entries.
     
  3. Barbara

    Barbara Ess Tii Eph Yu V.I.P. Lifetime

    You should tell us which entries you made it through. :nod:
     
  4. AngelsPeak

    AngelsPeak Wanna play?

    I will, once the poll has closed.
     
  5. Merc

    Merc Certified Shitlord V.I.P. Lifetime

    Entry #1: This one needs editing. It changes tenses at least four times in the first paragraph alone. There's a lot of intrigue and not a whole lot of answers. It was an okay story for me, but I wanted more closure and more of an idea of what was going on. I was interested to hear more but I had no idea whatsoever where the story was going and that detracted from it. I also would have really liked a description of the main character since there is nothing of it, not even a gender.

    Entry #2: Greatest story evar.

    Entry #3: The wording needs works and the twist at the end felt too weak. It read more like gore pornography which was slightly unnerving (a good thing for getting those uncomfortable feelings across). I think it would have been more enjoyable if there was more descriptions of her emotions, I just don't feel like I got anything specific. It sounds morbid, but you (the author) should spend more time lingering on some of the emotions and perhaps more of what she knows about these torture chambers.

    Entry #4: I don't mean to poke fun, but this made me laugh hard: He sighed explosively. How does one explosively sigh? Anyways, the descriptions were great but some of the repetition made the reading painful (such as there being 30 "he"'s in the first three paragraphs after the intro). I think this story does a much better job of painting a vague yet satisfying picture than the other entries though. The 3rd entry is the only one so far that seems to have a beginning and end and I was hoping to read more complete stories like that rather than being left behind.

    Entry #5: How does this person have both a studio and basement apartment on "barely passable" salary? There's a few places that make little sense such as the whole "beast with red eyes" and how the main character is "in denial" (from what?) and magically knows to avoid these things. Another part is where the MC says the creatures moved on to look for "more prey" yet they have seen and heard no sort of violence yet. It is funny though the MC is so naive that they start worrying about how to keep entertained. The complete left turn at the end threw me off though. Overall the whole story felt rushed and without effort. Details were incoherent and didn't match up many times and the character has zero description even a gender (damn, that's two stories now!) which makes it very hard to imagine their predicament.


    With all that being said, I think entry #4 is the clear winner here. It's the only story that grabbed my attention, held it, and made me genuinely wish there was more of it but only to find out what the MC really was (despite the extremely painful sounding cliches of 'Sentinels of Light' and the whole fighting darkness bit). I think the next contest held should have a longer wait period because some of these stories were most certainly rushed. Overall it was a decent crop though.
     
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  6. Smelnick

    Smelnick Creeping On You V.I.P.

    I voted for the first one. I really liked the tone of it and it really hit home. The tense changes were annoying bit forgiveable I suppose. Looked more like typos anyways. The twist at the end was kinda wow. Whodda thunk the old guy was actually his father. Really made me think.
     
  7. Bliss

    Bliss Sally Twit

    Number 4 wins for use of the name "Amy".

    Nah but really I liked that one the most. I loved how it made me feel about myself.

    No but in all seriousness it was very well written. They are all good but that one stood out for me.

    Amy
     
  8. Chaos

    Chaos Epic Gamer V.I.P. Lifetime

    *BUMP!!*

    Come on, guys. A lot of effort goes into writing, and it's really great to get feedback, so please read them and vote. :)
     
  9. Impact

    Impact Registered Member V.I.P. Lifetime

    Thanks for the reminder Marc, I forgot about these. I need to go read the rest.
     
  10. PretzelCorps

    PretzelCorps Registered Member

    I'm a little sad I didn't enter this competition, myself, but when I get a chance I'll try to read these stories and give some good feedback.
     

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