3 poems... just wrote them

Discussion in 'Art & Creative' started by lil_red_riding_hood, Feb 14, 2007.

  1. The first is about a friendship that ended over stupidity. I see this person every day and I miss them, but I hate them... The way I wrote this was sort of Jack Kerouac word-vomit-ish... IDK. The second one is about my relationship with the guy I lost my virginity to, and how things sort of go around again and bite you in the ass...in the end he lost me and I promised myself I would never let that happen again. The last one is about my dad... But in reality you can take them however you want, I mean, they're open for interpretation, and I want them to affect people in different ways... Anyway, here you go... I added the last one, just wrote it... I'm sure you can figure out what it's about... IF not, then you suck.:yes: Comments welcome...

    my mouth is full of mint dripping with every word I speak
    lighting up question after question
    trying to begin again
    clot the white of your blood under your skin
    the bruise is invisible and you can smile and close your eyes just to cover up the sin
    every day another test
    another lie
    another regret
    if everything turned out the way I wished then you would still be here holding me down so I didn’t trip
    if it hurts then it couldn’t be worth it
    but every time I see you and walk past I fall in hate again and wish for something better
    than this
    than this…war raging inside my head
    combating each other to end in a misguided bloody mess
    funny how friendships rot and rust with lack of emotion into dust

    an icebox encases my chest
    expelling all the waste built up inside of me
    watching as the blue runs from my veins into the abyss in front of me
    kill me with your savagery
    save me with your pain
    forget I was ever here and fall out of love again
    control your movements to coincide with your new life and trend
    murder the mere thought of being together with one word
    one look
    tearing me up from the outside in
    pleasing everyone around you
    wearing your celebrity skin
    remember the memory of never again
    remember me until you can see the truth
    I’m never coming back to you

    burning clean
    I will always remember the day you left me in my own puddle of guilt
    reaching for stones to stack for a wall to build
    protecting myself from your anger and sadness
    knocking me down with three words
    I hate you
    you continue to walk
    I continue to bleed
    my flesh burning clean until I feel you leave

    i’m never going back to that day
    flat on my stomach
    pain on my face
    fighting back through everything
    pushing toward the end
    trying to begin until you force me into my place
    i close my legs and shut my mouth like they all tell me
    say nothing and allow this fucking treatment to pass right on through me
    i am not an animal
    not your little toy to destroy
    i swallow my fate and refuse to cry
    touch me with the edges of your fingers
    burning through the callous of my skin
    just the thought of you turns my stomach
    your voice makes me sick
    and everything you ever did no one will ever see
    except for me
    no one will ever know the monster you became underneath the roof of that old building
    with a gun in your hand and your shirt half open
    with blood running from your gums
    the paste of you between my teeth and on your seat
    you shrug as my cherry drops and you forget
    i will never forget
    bleeding out every shred of shame i have i crouch down
    cover my eyes
    and hide
    i push my hand to my stomach and keep it all inside


  2. Can you people NOT reply? Why would you read it and not reply. I HATE YOU ALL.
  3. wyldesykosis

    wyldesykosis Feral

    Very good imagery! Altho I don't much like freestyle poetry considering it takes no skill, other than imagery. There is no rhyme to it all.....

    Nice poetry from a freestyle perspective!
  4. Hikaru_Youkai

    Hikaru_Youkai Registered Member

    I really, really liked it. :] I like how you thread your words together, and how much emotion is expressed through them. I admire you, and hope to see more of your works.
  5. Thank you. That made my day.

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